Saturday, March 7, 2009
Informative Passion Speeches
The speeches went well today for a first round. Think of feedback and critiques as a "gift". A chance to obtain information that will help you become stronger presentational speakers! Post your critiques here. Share three strengths and three improvements. Be sure to include details that clarify to the speaker exactly what was strong and how to make improvements. Keep going! You gain a better understanding about yourself and the process of communication with each speech!
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My critique was on Mathew.
ReplyDeleteThree strengths that I thought... there were more of those than weaknesses. His attention getter was great. The comparison to driving with the pedal down, to the crunching of the leaves....you could visualize what he was saying. Second being you have a lot of references, and did a great job incorporating them into the presentation. Third... I liked the ending. It made me want to go camping. Just generally your passion came through on the speech. You looked very relaxed, and I could picture you camping.
The only negatives that I saw, were the eye contact. But it was almost as if you were in your own world of camping, so it was not distracting. The other being too many words on the powerpoint. The pictures on the powerpoint were great, but too many words.
The only other thing as I brought up in class was the use of "you". It was your passion, not the audiences.
You did an awsome job!!!
Jaust a reminder, you said I could do two reviews next time.
ReplyDeleteThank you,
Maria
Dear Kim,
ReplyDeleteI thought your speech was wonderful!! You were very informed on the subject and you could tell that you were very passionate about reading and books. You were conversational and made great eye contact. You seemed very comfortable speaking and I was very comfortable listening to you.
Some things I would work on are to just be quiet when gathering your next thought instead of saying "um" (which there were very few of, I'm scraping for improvements :)), shorter titles on powerpoint slides and stronger transitions other than "first, next and third."
Overall, excellent job. :)
My critique is on Marie the ballroom dance enthusiast. Your strength is in your ability to speak comfortably, you appear to be verbal in nature and like to talk alot.You showed good eye contact with the audience and you smile alot.
ReplyDeleteYour weakness were you appeared to be disorganized and rambled. Your focus wasn't on the speech it was clear you were some where else. You repeat yourself to fill in the time. Your passion didn't come through.
Hello Patricia,
ReplyDeleteI am going to critique you on your speech last Friday in class. I have to find three strengths that you exhibited. I enjoyed your topic, and it kept my interest. You were able to use power point and that made the speech stronger. I was able to hear your voice, because you had good volume. There were three weaknesses that I must discuss. First, you relied on your paper too much and did not make proper eye contact with the audience. Secondly, your posture could have been better, and last but not least your speech could have been better organized.
DebraP
Dear Ellen,
ReplyDeleteI think that you were able to show your passion for Voleyball thru your speech!. Your tone of voice is very good, it allowed your audience to hear your speech loud and clear. Also, I was able to see your smile, which also showed the audience how much you enjoyed this topic.
Some things to improve are; the power point presentation, it needed images to catch better the audience's attention. Also, your eye contact was too high, it seemed you were looking the top of the audience heads. Finally, the conclusion of your speech could have been a little bit more interesting to leave a stronger impression.
Suzanne,
ReplyDeleteI thought your speech was great and I had a very hard time seeing things to improve. I liked your attention getter, your story, and still remember it which means it did its job! Your power point was good because you had personal pictures. You also made good eye contact and spoke clearly. Work on verbally citing more smoothly and concluding better. I thought your speech was great!
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ReplyDeleteHi Debra,
ReplyDeleteYour first strength was your attention getter, as I remember it was about the success of the Irish American Kennedy Family. Your conclusion and thesis statements were also good.
Since you didn't use powepoint it was hard to follow your speech. If you would have used powerpoints it would have been easier for us to differentiate between the main points and the sub-points. Microsoft Powerpoint is a very easy tool, you can learn it youself by playing around with it.
You really didn't explain why hunger was your passion. Instead you just gave a lot of info about the Irish Immigrants during the potato blight. You said you never felt hunger in your life, it would have been more realistic if you would have felt hunger. You could have tried it by not having breakfast before coming to class.
You were shifting your legs back and forth during the speech. We were told not to do so when we did our practise speech. Standing straight would have made you look more professional.
Despite my lengthy criticsms I enjoyed your speech and good luck for the next one.
Christina’s speech was very informative and engaging. Her passion really came out in her delivery. One very strong point of her speech was her enthusiasm. She was very animated and seemed genuinely excited to be sharing her passion for yoga. Her hand motions were geared directly to what she was saying and helped to direct, and detract from, the attention of the audience. Her research was very in-depth and she worked in quotes very conversationally. Like the crazy picture of the man all contorted, the introduction to her speech carried an impression of complication, but just as the twisted man was (hopefully) in control and regained his original posture; Christina guided the audience through the intricacies of her passion with the body of her speech. Some improvements can be made in her PowerPoint presentation which featured too many words on each slide. Also, she spoke a little too fast at times. And finally, she may want to work on her transitions as sometimes I heard her say “next thing”. Overall, it was an enjoyable speech.
ReplyDeleteHello everyone,
ReplyDeleteI am commenting on Danielle's speech, which was about her passion for swimming, snorkeling, and surfing. I loved that she used personal pictures and personal stories to emphasize her passion for the beach. I found the speech easy to follow, because she was well-organized and her main ideas flowed nicely into each other. I also thought that she had a great speaking voice and a great conversational style.
I think that there was a lot of confusion in citing sources, and maybe the delivery could have been more conversational and smooth. She also used some fillers, such as 'uh' and 'er', which seemed awkward. The only other thing, which I really had to scrape around to find, was that she closed the powerpoint slide instead of leaving it on the last slide. I just found it distracting to her conclusion and seemed unplanned.
Overall, I think Danielle gave an organized, passionate, and relatable speech. I found it difficult to point out individual improvements, although it generally seems that the whole class needs to improve the same things, including myself. I thought her speech went well, and I think everyone did well for the first speech of the semester!