Please post your speech critique of an assigned clasmate here. You should include three strengths and three improvement suggestions of action to help them work towards practicing in their next speech. This post is due by Thursday, Nov. 4th
Steven, I thought your presentation was good but there were some areas that you could work on. You have to add transitions instead of saying, for example, “I am now going to talk about/explain…” The PowerPoint could have used maybe some more color and graphics and you need to cite your information both on the power point and verbally.
There were some good points too though. I think that you made good eye contact and had a good conversational style. The information on the power point was precise and it was to the point, and you were confident in the information you were talking about and sounded like you were interested in it.
I thought you did very well for your first speech. You gave great eye contact and seemed very interested in your topic. You also came to class looking very professionay and connected with the audience by making your speech relatable. You definitely had enough content in your speech. The areas you could improve on would be the clarity of the structure of your speech. Following the verbal outline would definitely help in this area. Also, I didn't indentify a specific thesis or three main points. Possibly adding more visual and attention-getting slides would enhance your powerpoint. Shortening the content of them would also be beneficial because we wouldn't have to stare at them trying to read everything word-for-word. Hopefully you'll find this critique helpful. I look foward to your next speech.
Anthony's speech on the NY Yankee Stadium was very well done. Despite my Phillies fanaticism, his initial stats caught and kept my attention. His references were wide ranging from Jay Z, with whom I am only vaguely familiar, to "the House that Ruth built" with whom I am very familiar. His content was excellent. His slides were eyecatching. He cited well. His oral presentation flowed at an interesting pace. He might improve his next performance by visually engaging his audience more, reading aloud less from his powerpoint and assuming "Yankee doodle dandy" formal posture. By the end of his informative speech I felt as if I had missed out on experiencing a major American cultural icon, Yankee Stadium.
Both the date and the time shown on my posted comment are incorrect. Is anyone else's off or is it just my goofy computer? It's taken me several hours to even get it to post! Once after trying to post it to the site a message read ERROR bX-98x235 What the heck does that mean?
Serena's speech was very interesting. Her attention getter was unique and it engaged the audience. She had reliable sources and intriguing facts. The only negative criticism is that she slipped up on her conclusion. She announced their slogan after she had finished her speech. Other than that she had a great speech and It made me want to try Leinenkugel beer.
Sam's speech was very informative and interesting. It kept the audience's attention with the unique facts she found on her product. She had reliable sources and great pictures. A few things to better help her n her next speeches include, not reading off her powerpoint as much, having more of a conversational tone in her voice instead of being nervous, there were too many words on her powerpoint and her citing needs a little more work. Other than that she had a great speech and kept me interested the whole time. Some of her facts even made me question the beauty products I use and made me want to look more into Burt's Bees Products.
Stephanie, your informative cruise speech was very interesting. You managed to capture the essence of the cruise by using great "picture-painting" words and where the words left off, your great selection of images took over. For a few moments I think we all forgot we were sitting in a boring concrete building. Your citations were well placed.. I think you could have afforded a little bit better of an opening statement ("attention-getter.") Other than that, I think it was top-notch.
Steven, I thought your presentation was good but there were some areas that you could work on. You have to add transitions instead of saying, for example, “I am now going to talk about/explain…” The PowerPoint could have used maybe some more color and graphics and you need to cite your information both on the power point and verbally.
ReplyDeleteThere were some good points too though. I think that you made good eye contact and had a good conversational style. The information on the power point was precise and it was to the point, and you were confident in the information you were talking about and sounded like you were interested in it.
Joan,
ReplyDeleteI thought you did very well for your first speech. You gave great eye contact and seemed very interested in your topic. You also came to class looking very professionay and connected with the audience by making your speech relatable. You definitely had enough content in your speech. The areas you could improve on would be the clarity of the structure of your speech. Following the verbal outline would definitely help in this area. Also, I didn't indentify a specific thesis or three main points. Possibly adding more visual and attention-getting slides would enhance your powerpoint. Shortening the content of them would also be beneficial because we wouldn't have to stare at them trying to read everything word-for-word. Hopefully you'll find this critique helpful. I look foward to your next speech.
-Serena Sedlacek
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ReplyDeleteAnthony's speech on the NY Yankee Stadium was very well done. Despite my Phillies fanaticism, his initial stats caught and kept my attention. His references were wide ranging from Jay Z, with whom I am only vaguely familiar, to "the House that Ruth built" with whom I am very familiar. His content was excellent. His slides were eyecatching. He cited well. His oral presentation flowed at an interesting pace. He might improve his next performance by visually engaging his audience more, reading aloud less from his powerpoint and assuming "Yankee doodle dandy" formal posture. By the end of his informative speech I felt as if I had missed out on experiencing a major American cultural icon, Yankee Stadium.
ReplyDeleteBoth the date and the time shown on my posted comment are incorrect. Is anyone else's off or is it just my goofy computer? It's taken me several hours to even get it to post! Once after trying to post it to the site a message read ERROR bX-98x235 What the heck does that mean?
ReplyDeleteSerena's speech was very interesting. Her attention getter was unique and it engaged the audience. She had reliable sources and intriguing facts. The only negative criticism is that she slipped up on her conclusion. She announced their slogan after she had finished her speech. Other than that she had a great speech and It made me want to try Leinenkugel beer.
ReplyDeleteSam's speech was very informative and interesting. It kept the audience's attention with the unique facts she found on her product. She had reliable sources and great pictures. A few things to better help her n her next speeches include, not reading off her powerpoint as much, having more of a conversational tone in her voice instead of being nervous, there were too many words on her powerpoint and her citing needs a little more work. Other than that she had a great speech and kept me interested the whole time. Some of her facts even made me question the beauty products I use and made me want to look more into Burt's Bees Products.
ReplyDeleteStephanie, your informative cruise speech was very interesting. You managed to capture the essence of the cruise by using great "picture-painting" words and where the words left off, your great selection of images took over. For a few moments I think we all forgot we were sitting in a boring concrete building. Your citations were well placed.. I think you could have afforded a little bit better of an opening statement ("attention-getter.") Other than that, I think it was top-notch.
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